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Your name (F/N) (L/N) you just woke up to your computer ping like hell, it was probably just gamzee, so you get out of your bed keeping your warm (F/C) quilt wrapped Round you you open your husk top to see what was pinging it was pester chum so you open it up

Stargazer has just logged on to pester chum
Terminallycapricious has just logged on to pesterchum

Tc: HeY My WiCkEd SiS We NeEd HeLp KuRbRo Is VeRy PiSt ThAnKs To An AmPoRa CaN YoU pLeAsE CoMe OvEr QuIkLy 
SG: hey and yea sure I'll be over as soon asap 
Tc: ThAnKs SiS

Terminallycapricious logged out of pesterchum
Stargazer logged out of pesterchum 

You started getting ready to go over to the high blood mansion you grab things like some your fave video games, a small blanket, pretty much anything you think you needed, then went outside and hopped on your (F/C) beach cruiser after strapping your back back on it and taking off. 

TIME LAPSE -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

You bike up all the way to high blood mansion put it on its stand and that's when you start hearing kurloz is still throwing a rage fit and mituna trying to shoosh pap him, sadly they haven't been the best moirails ever sense mituna accident that you sorta know of, you get ready to go in to the house you open the door swiftly and next thing you know a vase of purple and black goes flying past your head and at the top of the stairs mituna is straddling kurloz trying to shoosh pap him, obviously not working you walk up the stairs and pull out a bag of marshmallows from your overly stuffed back pack open it and shove one in kurloz's mouth, and motion mituna to get off and then you begin to shoosh pap kurloz and give him tiny friendly kisses on his forehead. After five minutes kurloz finally settles down, he lays his head on yours and snakes his arms around you when he realizes who was loving on him and eats the marshmallow in tgehis mouth. Once the very angry high blood calmed all the way you look up at him and say " feeling better kurlly" he slowly nods and smiles at you 


Preview over please my watchers or who ever took the time to read this comment if you want the rest of the story please comment below I really want to know what you think and if you want more of this story, but most of all I'm open to requests for any story thanks
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W1CK3D-3L1X3R Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I lOvE iT! iF yOu FeEl LiKe It YoU sHoUlD cOnTiNuE sIs!
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Kisames-Real-Girl Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014
I really like this whole story!!!!! I'd love to read more
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Lawl every one is telling me that im trying to finish it just no inspiration
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Kisames-Real-Girl Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
I realy like the part  where mituna is trying to calm Kurloz down and the reader takes over~ An idea I thought of for the stry was to have kurloz not like the reader first....like she admits to having a flush crush on him but he doesnt really like her...atleast that he knows of....
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thats kinda what it is but if i like stupidly dident express that enough im sorry :(
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Kisames-Real-Girl Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
its alright the story was still super cool :0)
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you
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snowefox Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
More? please!
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm working on the rest right now ( I hate writers block)
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snowefox Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Ah the forever fanfic disease known as writers block. If I may say something I find if listening to an change of music may help or think of it as an roleplay set the scene and go. :3 hopefully maybe that helps and can't wait for it good luck
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u reader I'm on the confession of the reader
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snowefox Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
lol okays
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tigerstar5078 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student General Artist
I luv dis
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you the rest will be posted soon
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Misteria2477 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Moar purrlease? Thank mew!
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Rest will be uploaded soon
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Misteria2477 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yay!
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kentaka123456 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
More plz
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Soon
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flippin-nuggets-25 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
more please and thank you.
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Soon lol and your welcome 
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flippin-nuggets-25 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
No problem buddy!
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fearonpenneth Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
More please! 803
My fav part was marshmallows part.
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you and I am in the moment of writing up more I'm glad so many liked it 
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katy221 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Mores pleasee!!!
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katy221 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Student General Artist
My fav part is the part where kurloz starts the rage fit and reader almost gets hit 
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks and I will but tell me your fave part please
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digigirl6 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
moarr pl sQQ
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I will please tell me your face part
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digigirl6 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
my what o.o?
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Fave not face lol
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digigirl6 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014
lol i laughed when you said mituna was straddling him
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol thanks hey do you know how to submit stories as art and not a journal
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digigirl6 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
no idea i dont54 writ54e many67 fanfics
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PlasitcToast Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Marshmellows always help :'D  You should make moreeee
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I was planning on finishing it one way or another so I will, and funny thing I was eating marshmallows when I decided it lol thanks lots my fan
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PlasitcToast Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Marshmellows taste gud =w= Your very welcome :3 :iconfuckers-gonna-fuck:
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Crying Death the Kid Emote Thank you
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PlasitcToast Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Bunny Emoji-30 (I'm cute) [V2]  Anytime~
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay
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PlasitcToast Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
c:
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pawzroo Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student Digital Artist
i would like to see more plz

:sniff: rvmp :puppy-eyes: Puppy Eyes :prettyplease: - NaNoEmo 5/30 
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll work on it but no promises on it being done by the end of this week
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pawzroo Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Student Digital Artist
take your time 
no rush 
nice story 
Cacho and Greeny Hug 
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks
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MistressSuki92 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist

I liked this. But you need to work on shortening your sentences.

You use too many commas instead of simply ending the sentence

and stating a new one. And you were also missing a period here

and there for the ends of your sentences. But this story was very

good despite all that so don't be discouraged! Please write more!

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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, I get overly worried about my writings and stuff so I end up doing lots of commas or lots of periods stuff.
But your more of encouraging me to do better thank you for the criticism I'd love more
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MistressSuki92 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome. But I suggest you get a beta for your stories. It would really help you a lot.
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rentunumber2 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
A beta
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MistressSuki92 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist

Yes~! Just in case you don't know what a beta is.

A beta is a person you send your finished writing to

and they take care of spelling/grammatical errors

for you! They're like your editor! Very helpful if you ask me.


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